雅思写作大作文范文分析-双边讨论类

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

翻译：一些人认为在科研，商业领域和学术界，尽可能多的分享信息是有利的。另一些人认为，有些信息太重要或者太有价值了，无法自由分享。讨论这两种观点并给出自己的看法。

分析：本文题目中有两个关键词--share as much information as possible和share freely.关于这两个关键词，小编碰到的学生和老师们提供过两种理解方式：

种：shared freely- 这个freely从本质上来说就是能不能自由传播- too important or too valuable to be shared freely.- 也就是说太重要，太宝贵不可以自由传播，那么这样的不自由传播就有两个情况- 1. 根本不传播（信息封锁：比如政府机密等等-too important）2.即便传播也要付费传播 （ 知识付费- 比如科学研究发明等等-too valuable）
share as much information as possible-就是什么都传播 不分任何种类大众都可以随意接触的到。

第二种：share as much information aspossible当中包含免费传播和付费传播，也就是“不封闭“， 不管以何种方式，这些信息都最终都被传播出去了；

too important or too valuable to be shared freely就是不传播，类似于“机密“。大家怎么看呢，更倾向于哪种解释呢？

我们来看一下一位外教对这个题目的解读：

Understand the question is simple enough –it is basically asking whether or not research in various fields should beshared freely or not.（理解这个问题很简单——它基本上是问-是否应该自由分享各个领域的研究成果。）

But there are so many tricky parts to that!Are we talking about government secrets? How should we understand the wordfreely?  Should you just focus onscientific research? What if you don’t talk about academic and businessresearch?（但这其中有很多棘手的地方，我们是在谈论政府机密吗？我们应该如何理解“freely”这个词？我们可以只写科学研究吗？如果不写学术和商业研究会怎么样？）

To be completely honest, I do not think itis a very good IELTS question even though it is from the real test. I thinksome students might only write about scientific research and some pickyexaminers will mark them down.（如果一些学生只谈及了科学研究，一些考官可能会给他们低分数）

好啦～我们来总结一下，也就是说：

你可以按照上面提及的种观点去理解题目，然后可以写如：1）科学家或者商业人士付出了很大的努力和艰辛做出来的科研成果或商业创新，他们理应从中获益，对这些成果和创新进行付费也是人们也尊重他们的努力和贡献的一种方式
或者2）知识付费可以帮助学者和商业精英们有更多的钱投入接下来的研究和创作中等等。

你也可以按照上面第二种观点去书写题目：只是注意在进行展开，比如使用举例论证时，举如商业机密，国防技术（defence technology）等等的例子更好，因为更符合“不可以传播” “keep as a secret to the public” “ cannot be exposed to the public”。要涉及到题目提及的这三个领域scientific research, business, and the academic world.

那么来看今天的高分范文分析吧：

范文分析：

The question of how much information relevant to various areas of scientific and academicresearch should be shared is becoming more and more important as the pace of technological innovation quickens(好词：可以把作为固定短语背诵-随着技术革新步伐的加快-科技类题目可使用，也可以在短语中加入限制性领域如：As the pace of medical/educationaltechnology innovationquickens, ….) and theinternet allows for instant collaboration. Inmy opinion, information is a valuable, potentially dangerous asset and should onlybe shared freely in particular circumstances（在特殊情况下可以分享-specific situation）.

（开头段：背景介绍+给出观点）
 
Advocates（支持者） of freelysharing information rightly argue that collaborationleads to faster results. This applies to scientists, who can helpeach by offering their individual research results, businesses, which can worktogether as long as they are not competitors on advertising or product development, as well as academics, who need fresh perspectives（new ideas/new views） to push their work to higherplateaus (get better). Take for example the potential for sharing information inthe business world. Google has built their successful advertising business by workingtogether with various companies and sharing information. Google collects avariety of statistics related to users including their location and interests.This information is shared with advertisers who can then better target ads for users. It allows the consumer tosee more relevant products and services and the companiesadvertising to target their audience more efficiently.

(主体1段-分享信息的好处-综合提及了科研，商业和学术三个领域，并给出了真实而具体的例子-google)
 
While there are decided advantages(显而易见的好处-请背诵使用=clear advantages) like the onementioned above, information is still a valuable asset that individuals and companiesshould safeguard. In a perfect world, wemight expect people to openly share everything they know but the social andeconomic constructions of our actual world make this a naive proposition. One interesting example of thisis from a recent news article about Elon Musk where he explained why his rocketcompany SpaceX does not apply for patents on any new technology. He reasoned（此处为reason这个词的动词使用，可以理解为；to think about thereasons – 给予…原因，为….辩解-好词，请背诵） that his maincompetitors are governments, not private companies. If his company discloses its innovations then domestic and foreigngovernments can take advantage of the shared technology andpotentially disrupt his business. This is just one example of howsharing can prove damaging（好词：替换have a negative impact – 有负面影响-背诵） in a capitalist society.

（主体2段-写第二方观点，信息很重要很valuable，不能freely share；句话为一个承上启下句，句型可套用：While thereare decided advantages like the onementioned above, …..is still….; 后面给出了真实的例子，例证不能freely share的原因，本段的亮点在于例子，足够具体）.
 
In conclusion, though sharing might be a valid standpoint（好词：=defensible view-尽管分享信息有道理-可背诵） in aperfect world, it is not feasible（impossible） under current global conditions. Instead of looking to increase sharing,governments should do more to support innovative companies and researchers.This will have a larger overall impact.

 (尾段总结，首句句型可套用：though doing sth might be a validstandpoint, it is not feasible under ….conditions.)
 
好词：

asset ：可数名词：a useful or valuable quality, skill, or person-有价值的人或物，如：Knowledge of languages is a real asset in this sort of work.（语言技能在这种工作中是非常重要/有用的；He'll be a great asset to the team.他将是这个团队的宝贵财富。

patent: the official legalright to make or sell an invention for a particular number of years- 专利权，专利，专利品-雅思阅读中也常考到，请积累背诵。