雅思大作文范文分析-环境保护

Climate change is a phenomenon that affects countries all over the world. Many people strongly believe that it is the responsibility of individuals, rather than corporations and governments, to deal with this problem. To what extent do you agree?

话题：社会类- 环境保护

类型：同意与否

翻译：气候变化影响世界各国。许多人坚信，解决这个问题是个人的责任，而不是公司和政府的责任。你是否同意？

关键词： climate change, responsibility- individuals, corporations, government

分析：气候问题一直是国际热点之一，特别是这次澳大利亚森林大火蔓延，对当地生态系统，野生动物，以及人类生活造成了重大影响，使得气候问题再次引起全世界人们的关注。

气候变化对人类的影响是巨大的。

Climate change is perhaps the most profound（=extreme 强烈的，极度的） challenge （好词-注意形容词修饰搭配）ever to have confronted human social, political, and economic systems. (confront - to face, meet or deal with a difficult situation or person - 面对，面临，遭遇- confront with/by sth)

然而人类并没有制定出行之有效的应对方案。

The social problem‐solving mechanisms（体制，结构方式- 社会问题的应对机制） we currently possess（to have or own sth- 拥有，具有）were not designed, and have not evolved（进化）, to cope with anything like an interlinked set of problems(相关联的问题- 指气候问题复杂多样，影响面广，牵扯诸多国家，诸多行业） of this severity, scale, and complexity.  （我们现有的社会问题应对机制并没有经过精心设计，或是进化到足以解决像气候变化这样如此严重，涉及面广，复杂的问题。

很多人会直接想到，气候变化是由人类行为造成的，那么对于个人来讲如何能够减慢气候变化进程呢？

For example:

Take public transport instead of the car or, for longer journeys, the train rather than fly.

Eat less meat and more vegetables, pulses and grains, and don’t forget to turn off the light when leaving a room or the water when shampooing.

但是真的只有个人应该为气候变化负责吗？

A recent report found that just 100 companies are responsible for 71% of global emissions since 1988. Incredibly, a mere 25 corporations and state-owned entities were responsible for more than half of global industrial emissions in that same period. （来源，美国在线期刊The Conversation)

由此我们可以看出，公司也应该为此负责。

Most of these are coal and oil producing companies and include ExxonMobil, Shell, BP, Chevron, Gazprom, and the Saudi Arabian Oil Company. （你可以用来举例子，做举例论证）

那么政府呢？

Governments have the power to enact（动词-实施，制定，尤其指法律方面） legislation（法律，立法）which could regulate industries to remain within sustainable（可持续的） emission（排放） limits （限制）and adhere（与后面standards相搭配，符合标准）to environmental protection standards.

Governments could also make renewable（能源可再生） energy generation, from sources such as solar panels and wind turbines, affordable to all consumers through subsidies（补助金，津贴）. Affordable and low-carbon mass transportation must replace emission-heavy means of travel, such as planes and cars.（注意政府这两段文字中的词汇搭配非常地道，生词可以背诵一下，咱们雅思写作考试中有不少问政府，公司，个人谁负责的题目，在写政府责任时，可以使用）

好啦，看了上面的分析是不是有点思路了呢，那么用The Coversation上，我觉得非常有道理的一句话，结束这段分析吧：

While individuals may have a role to play, appealing to individual virtues for addressing climate change is something akin（=similar - 相似的，类似的）to victim-blaming（责备受害者） because it shifts the burden from those who ought to act（应当承担责任，做出行动的人） to those who are most likely to be affected（最容易受到影响的人）by climate change. A far more just and effective approach would be to hold those who are responsible for climate change accountable for their actions.

（尽管个人可以发挥作用，但诉诸于个人的美德来应对气候变化却类似于不停的责备受害者，因为它将负担从应负起责任采取行动的人转移到了最有可能受到气候变化影响的人身上。一种更公正，更有效的方法是让理应对气候变化负责的人才去行动。）

那么接下来，咱们来看一下今天的精选范文

范文分析：

Climate change is a very real danger that threatens not only our lives but also the quality of life of future generations. （可用句型： .... is a very serious problem that influencing not only …. but also …) To combat this I strongly disagree that individuals need to take responsibility because governments, in cooperation with private companies have both a greater responsibility and capacity in this matter.

(开头段：1句引入+非常清晰的表明观点- 记住agree or disagree的文章，开头一定要非常清晰的给出你自己的立场，不可以含糊不清）

Climate change cannot simply be the responsibility of private citizens because they do not have the ability to affect large systemic changes in the way that governments in conjunction with corporations do. People can only contribute in small ways; for every person who recycles there are several people who do not and there is no certain way to change this. Governments, on the other hand, can enact legislation requiring both individuals and large corporations to abide(动词-遵守） by certain restrictions. Laws for corporations are the real solution as they contribute by far the most to climate change and by reducing how much waste produced and how they treat that waste, climate change can be seriously countered.

（主体1段给出条原因support自己的观点，从能力角度讲：个人力量不足，政府力量大可以立法）

The second reason governments should be responsible for combating climate change is that governments are responsible for global problems while individuals should only have to deal with local and personal problems. A person should only concern themselves with their job and personal life because that is the extent of their responsibility. Governments are responsible for various things related to their citizens including security, health care in some cases, and education. Included in security is the environment because it impacts citizen’s well-being; therefore this falls under the remit of governmental responsibility.

（主体2段给出第二条原因support自己的观点，从职能角度讲：政府职能和个人职能的差异）

Individuals will never be able to have the effect government will and it is not their responsibility at any rate. In my opinion, governments, by taking measures to rein in corporate and private waste are taking up their rightful burden.

这篇文章虽然我没有为大家标出太多的词汇，但是这篇文章有一个很值得学习的地方，就是它的前后呼应，连贯一致，请看文中我所有标中划线粉色的部分，开头提到了政府承担是因为政府的能力和职责，主体段一段能力一段职责，结尾段又再次总结能力和职责。我们可以看到在本文中，开头起到了很好的点明主旨，引出下文的功能，结尾段也起到了很好的总结收束功能，主体段和开头结尾相呼应，写的非常好，请小伙伴们借鉴哦。

以上就是今天的大作文范文分析，这道题目不简单，请仔细阅读学习并背诵里面的好词好句哦。